Hey, welcome to Modarchive! Land of pies and sweet tunes!
I listened through this song and I can see what you were going for. Soft sine leads, warm synths and mellow dynamics. You did quite well at achieving the mood, but frankly, you had several opportunities in the song to bring it even further. Here's some feedback:
- The intro was easily the best part of the song - good job on that one.
- The chip bass you used doesn't feel right in the context of particularly the first half of the song; it lacks texture and sounds thin. Can't quite place my finger on it.
- At pattern 11 I could hear you running out of ideas and merelly repeated yourself. there was definitelly potential for more. More variation or things going around in the background would have been an improvement in breaking the repetition.
- Loved the laugh track, you used it perfectly in pattern 4 and 5 to truly mark the mood progression.
For a beginner, you're good - merelly inexperienced. You can only get better from here on.